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hotel managnt ps!! - haris_khan87 - 08/01/2006
im applyin for hotel managmnt so plz ny one can guide me how to write itz personal statemnt or tell me sum link tht can help!!!ill be really thankful
RE: hotel managnt ps!! - peaceful_blossom - 08/01/2006
I dont know much about applying for management course.
But these are some examples of personal statements on management, unfortunately not hotel management:
http://www.studential.com/personalstatements/getpscourse.asp?type=32
You can take some ideas from there.
Here is a link on guide lines on how to write a personal statement:
http://www.studential.com/guide/write_personal_statement.htm
What a personal statement is there for is to write about yourself and why you want to do your chosen course.
Some things that it needs to include:
Why you want to do the course?
What kind of experience have you do?
What kind of person are you? e.g extra activities you do? What you do in your free time?
Good luck.
RE: hotel managnt ps!! - haris_khan87 - 09/01/2006
thnkx man ...but does it matta if have no experience??
RE: hotel managnt ps!! - peaceful_blossom - 09/01/2006
For some courses e.g medicine and law, experience is truely needed.
But for management I'm not sure.
Dont you have any experience at all? Even a small thing?
Experience shows that the person has looked into the career and know what the course is all about.
But if you dont have any exxperience then back your personal statement with other things eg things you've done at school or even if you work. Or research you have done to know about the course?
Experience doesnt have to be a big thing? Maybe you helped manage a small group? etc
Good luck
RE: hotel managnt ps!! - haris_khan87 - 09/01/2006
pls advice me on ma ps!!!here it is:-
Hospitality and tourism today are the most successful dynamic industries, their global importance continues to grow and ever increasing number of national economies are dependent on them. This popular and long established degree course will open the doors to a wide number of employment options. This is why it is an exciting and fascinating period in both commercial and economic world to study Hospitality Management.
I took Science subjects at the start of GCE O levels according to my parents advice, but the subject that I was interested in was Business Studies because as a child I used to fantasy that I have my own big hotel with big cars, driving in big celebrities and I thought the key to this hotels door is Business Studies at that moment because I did not have any Hospitality Management option at that time. So I switched my subjects to Business Studies, Psychology and Math during my A levels. Even though not having any background for Business Studies from O levels, I spend many hours on my academics and continued to excel in school, achieving good grades in my class tests. Throughout Business Studies, to complement what has been taught I have researched real-life business solutions and how they have been implemented, such as the responsive marketing used by Coca Cola to prolong their business cycle and sustain major profitability. Mathematics is a pivotal subject on which so many others depend. I relish the challenge of problem solving that Mathematics provides. For me, it is an endlessly intriguing subject, as the discipline appears limitless, allowing so much scope for further study and research. Studying Psychology gives me insight into human influences on organizational behavior through studying motivational theories such as the hierarchy of needs model proposed by Maslow, whilst the course work has developed my skills in collecting and analysis data in order to establish trends and draw conclusions. I have greatly improved in English Language after my GCSE’s and will be appearing for TOEFEL this month.
I have a great passion for Hospitality Management. My father is operating a restaurant in Berlin, Germany and here in Pakistan. Whenever I get time I assist him with his work, therefore I know how to manage customers and a lot about catering. Being appointed as Deputy Head Boy in the sixth form was a great honour to me. My skills were greatly enhanced by holding this position, as I would often have to listen, and respond to issues brought up by fellow prefects, and students lower down the school. Through activities such as Lunch duty, I learnt the worth of different leadership skills, and that it is important to treat everyone as an individual in order to get results. I was always keen to stay into the evening to help out at school events. Last winters I worked for successful food industry Kolson as a Sales person in an Exhibition for 3 days it was a great experience. I am a committed member of my schools cricket and basketball team, I have captained team in previous seasons which required leadership, confidence and diligence. In my spare time, I enjoy music, going to the gym and socializing. I am a regular of Financial Times, enjoy keeping up with current affairs and business news and reading variety of books, both fiction and non-fiction such as ‘Making It Happen’ (J. Harvey-Jones) where his common sense approach complements the management theories of more staid texts. This degree will equip me for my career in the unpredictable and fast moving world of commerce.
When I envision my life some years from now, I imagine two possible scenarios. In the first, I am standing in front of a boardroom of a profitable Hotel, assisting executives in solving a central challenge to their company's maximum functioning. The other image could not be more different: in this vision, I am working to my bolster my own fledgling Hotel.
I believe that my experiences have prepared me for independent university life. My social skills together with my ambition to succeed in life prove me to be good candidate for a Hospitality Management Degree. I would love to pursue a career in the field of Hospitality and I believe my choice of institutions matches my capabilities as well as my aspirations to become a successful Hospitality manager.
RE: hotel managnt ps!! - peaceful_blossom - 11/01/2006
First thing I have to say that it looks very long, Are you sure its going to fit in?
Secondly, All the points I have made are just possible ways of improvement and you do not need to use them. Hopefully it helps.
Quote:Hospitality and tourism today are the most successful dynamic industries, their global importance continues to grow and ever increasing number of national economies are dependent on them. This popular and long established degree course will open the doors to a wide number of employment options. This is why it is an exciting and fascinating period in both commercial and economic world to study Hospitality Management.
I would not start of the personal statement giving out fact about the world around. But why you want to do it?
Yes it’s a big thing but why does it appeal to you?
Very wordy I would try to but more meaning in to it.
Quote:I took Science subjects at the start of GCE O levels according to my parents advice, but the subject that I was interested in was Business Studies because as a child I used to fantasy that I have my own big hotel with big cars, driving in big celebrities and I thought the key to this hotels door is Business Studies at that moment because I did not have any Hospitality Management option at that time.
Are you a mature student? Because you did O Levels? Sorry what is O levels?
Reading this paragraph is a little big headed.
It’s telling me that the only reason you want to do this course is because it will give you lots of money?
What if you don’t get that much money?
What do you enjoy about management? Why this course from all the others? And I wouldn’t say its because it will allow me to be rich.
Quote:So I switched my subjects to Business Studies, Psychology and Math during my A levels. Even though not having any background for Business Studies from O levels, I spend many hours on my academics and continued to excel in school, achieving good grades in my class tests. Throughout Business Studies, to complement what has been taught I have researched real-life business solutions and how they have been implemented, such as the responsive marketing used by Coca Cola to prolong their business cycle and sustain major profitability.
I think its great that you found out that business studies is for you. And that you put lots of work into getting your grades.
But what about business studies do you like? Whats the difference between BS and Sciences?
Quote: Mathematics is a pivotal subject on which so many others depend. I relish the challenge of problem solving that Mathematics provides. For me, it is an endlessly intriguing subject, as the discipline appears limitless, allowing so much scope for further study and research.
If that’s what Maths help you with then that’s fine. But how are these ‘skills’ going to help you with the future career?
Quote: Studying Psychology gives me insight into human influences on organizational behavior (behaviour??) through studying motivational theories such as the hierarchy of needs model proposed by Maslow, whilst the course work has developed my skills in collecting and analysis data in order to establish trends and draw conclusions.
Again how are these ‘skills’ going to help you with the future career/course?
Quote: I have greatly improved in English Language after my GCSE’s and will be appearing for TOEFEL this month.
That’s fine. Not sure what TOEFEL is though?
Quote:I have a great passion for Hospitality Management. My father is operating a restaurant in Berlin, Germany and here in Pakistan. Whenever I get time I assist him with his work, therefore I know how to manage customers and a lot about catering.
Ahh your from Pakistan that’s where all the O levels come from. Are you apply to English unis?
You know how to manage? Like? How? What skills do you need? etc
Quote:Being appointed as Deputy Head Boy in the sixth form was a great honour to me. My skills were greatly enhanced by holding this position, as I would often have to listen, and respond to issues brought up by fellow prefects, and students lower down the school.
What skills? Team work? Leadership? Communication?
Quote:Through activities such as Lunch duty, I learnt the worth of different leadership skills, and that it is important to treat everyone as an individual in order to get results. I was always keen to stay into the evening to help out at school events. Last winters I worked for successful food industry Kolson as a Sales person in an Exhibition for 3 days it was a great experience. I am a committed member of my schools cricket and basketball team, I have captained team in previous seasons which required leadership, confidence and diligence.
You list some skills here! Try to lick all the experience up and talk about them. Maybe write about team work? What does it involve?
Quote:In my spare time, I enjoy music, going to the gym and socializing. I am a regular of Financial Times, enjoy keeping up with current affairs and business news and reading variety of books, both fiction and non-fiction such as ‘Making It Happen’ (J. Harvey-Jones) where his common sense approach complements the management theories of more staid texts.
I would be tempted not to put information on the ‘making it happen’ unless you inspired you somehow?
Quote:This degree will equip me for my career in the unpredictable and fast moving world of commerce.
When I envision my life some years from now, I imagine two possible scenarios. In the first, I am standing in front of a boardroom of a profitable Hotel, assisting executives in solving a central challenge to their company's maximum functioning. The other image could not be more different: in this vision, I am working to my bolster my own fledgling Hotel.
Its good that you have high aims but try not to be ‘big headed’
Quote:I believe that my experiences have prepared me for independent university life. My social skills together with my ambition to succeed in life prove me to be good candidate for a Hospitality Management Degree. I would love to pursue a career in the field of Hospitality and I believe my choice of institutions matches my capabilities as well as my aspirations to become a successful Hospitality manager.
Overall a okay personal statement.
I little too wordy in many places so I would try to make it flow more.
Some good things written.
Sorry quick look, busy at the moment with exams.
Hope it helps.
RE: hotel managnt ps!! - haris_khan87 - 12/01/2006
thnkx dude u helped alot god bless u n best of luck foh ur exam .....i waz wanderin how abt a simple strtin
[/quote] Hospitality industry has interested me since child hood and I have a great passion for it. I was greatly inspired by my uncle who used to work in famous Holiday Inn and really fascinated by his management skills that he used to tell. I often used to assist him in his work. Since there is no scope for hospitality industry in Pakistan and no universities for proper studying for this area, I would like to apply for Hospitality Management degree inside UK.
n by da way i ve stated ma aims foh da course too
Quote: This popular and long established degree course will open the doors to a wide number of employment options. This is why it is an exciting and fascinating period in both commercial and economic world to study Hospitality Management.but the subject that I was interested in was Business Studies because as a child I used to fantasy that I have my own big hotel with big cars, driving in big celebrities and I thought the key to this hotels door is Business Studies at that moment because I did not have any Hospitality Management option at that time. So I switched my subjects to Business Studies, Psychology and Math during my A levels
n is this fantasy thingy rite or shld i remove it??
thnkx foh da help man!!
RE: hotel managnt ps!! - peaceful_blossom - 12/01/2006
Thank you very much for the good luck. Just a favour can you please write in proper english because I find it hard to read the other.
Quote:This area has interested me from an early age and I have a great passion for it. I was greatly inspired by my uncle who used to work in famous Holiday Inn and really fascinated by his management skills that he used to tell. I often used to assist him in his work.
I dont really like the word 'passion'.
''From a early age I have studied my uncle working for a famous Holiday Inn, this has inspried and fascinated. From this I knew that management was for me.''
Something like that. You can write that you helped him too but do write more about that experience. And write about the mangement skill! But tell them what you think the management skill are.
Quote: This popular and long established degree course will open the doors to a wide number of employment options. This is why it is an exciting and fascinating period in both commercial and economic world to study Hospitality Management.
I think the part about opening you options is good.
Quote:This is why it is an exciting and fascinating period in both commercial and economic world to study Hospitality Management.
Umm I'm not sure about this. I dont think I know what your trying to say there?
Quote:but the subject that I was interested in was Business Studies because as a child I used to fantasy that I have my own big hotel with big cars, driving in big celebrities and I thought the key to this hotels door is Business Studies at that moment because I did not have any Hospitality Management option at that time. So I switched my subjects to Business Studies, Psychology and Math during my A levels
As I have said before I'm really dont like the idea about 'big car' ect.
But you can say that you want to build your own hotel maybe dont add the big part. And that you see the course like a step to reach that aim.
Quote:thnkx foh da help man!!Lol! This is the first time I've been called man so many time in a row
All the best
RE: hotel managnt ps!! - haris_khan87 - 13/01/2006
thnkx doodh how abt tht lol...ny wayz u helpd me alot ma prayers r wid u...PEAce !!
RE: hotel managnt ps!! - peaceful_blossom - 13/01/2006
lol!
your welcome
good luck.