09/11/2006, 07:35 PM
Hey there, bad luck about your tutor changing your personal statement. I expect most tutors see more personal statements than students - but that doesn't always make them more qualified to comment!
I'm a firm believer in the fact that your statement should get across why you're interested in studying your statement and if you don't feel yours is doing that, change it if you can. However you don't want to just be talking about yourself - more the actual subject if you can - noone wants to read a paragraph full of I have always loved ... ever since I was young ... blah blah blah.
If you can try and show your statement to a sixth form tutor or whoever deals with most of the applications at your school or college - they can probably give you a bit more advice.
Good luck.
I'm a firm believer in the fact that your statement should get across why you're interested in studying your statement and if you don't feel yours is doing that, change it if you can. However you don't want to just be talking about yourself - more the actual subject if you can - noone wants to read a paragraph full of I have always loved ... ever since I was young ... blah blah blah.
If you can try and show your statement to a sixth form tutor or whoever deals with most of the applications at your school or college - they can probably give you a bit more advice.
Good luck.