22/03/2010, 04:46 PM
Pretty good - a few more drafts and you'll be ready. 
Just a note though, you keep saying "I". Perhaps it would be wise to consider how you could contribute to the university? What would enrich the university by allowing you to enrol?
Just a thought though - apart from that, nothing much I can say.
Just a note though, you keep saying "I". Perhaps it would be wise to consider how you could contribute to the university? What would enrich the university by allowing you to enrol?
Just a thought though - apart from that, nothing much I can say.