beginning of person statement help please?x - Printable Version +- Student Discussion (https://www.studentdiscussion.co.uk) +-- Forum: Applying to university (https://www.studentdiscussion.co.uk/forum-24.html) +--- Forum: UCAS Forms & Personal Statements (https://www.studentdiscussion.co.uk/forum-2.html) +--- Thread: beginning of person statement help please?x (/thread-1877.html) |
beginning of person statement help please?x - Guest - 15/11/2006 i am applying for events, music and media management entertainment management hospitality and event management arts management events management music and media management what u reckon of the beggingng so far? 'My love of music and entertainment events has helped me to realise that I want to be involved in this line of work. This is why I have chosen to apply for a course that relates to my interests. I love the experience of going to carnivals, festivals and music concerts and would like to be a part of what goes on behind the scenes and work with a project as it grows and becomes complete.' RE: beginning of person statement help please?x - Guest - 18/11/2006 Umm.. with all due respect, what you've got there is completely basic 'I want to do this because I like it' stuff. You really gotta work on a better intro. An intro like that isn't gonna stick in anyone's mind, let alone an admission's tutor. Just being blunt. |